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    Is George really stubborn?
    I think the parent are

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    THE FORBIDDEN TEMPLE (The Demonic Secret Place)
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    Author : Dave Sun
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    CHAPTER 2 (TWO)
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    #KENXO_HIGH_SCHOOL*
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    11:00am
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    A Lexus car was parked at the garage as a door opens which Mr Barry stepped out of the car by his left hand side was George who also step down as he suit off following his father at the back
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    #AT_PRINCIPLE_OFFICE*
    11:30am
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    . Principal: Welcome sir, am Mr Steve, am in charge here, how can i help you?
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    . Mr Barry: Thank you, Am Mr Barry and i want to enroll my son in your school
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    . Mr Steve: Well Mr Barry, i will loves to asked your son some few questions.
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    . Mr Barry: And if you don’t mind, you’re free to asked him; you are his teacher after all!
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    . Mr Steve: Please have a seat!
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    . Bringing out a long note and a biro as he write down something.
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    . Mr Steve: What’s your name young man?
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    . George: Am George!
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    . Mr Steve: Your three name?
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    . George: George Barry Best
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    . Mr Steve: How old are you?
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    . George: Am 13!
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    . Mr Steve: Your last grade was
    Grade 6 but now am putting you into grade 7.
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    . George: Yes; that’s!
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    . Mr Steve: Good, which subject did you loves most?
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    . George: All!
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    . Mr Steve: Wow, that means you are genius!
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    . Mr Barry: Yes, even though he’s genius, he got some extra thing i don’t like seeing.
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    . Mr Steve: Will you like to share Mr Barry?
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    . Mr Barry: No…. Steve am already exhausted
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    . Mr Steve: Okay, George since you are genius, will you mind if I ask you something outside of that?
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    . George: Okay; it’s like a challenge?
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    . Mr Steve: Yes, if only you’ll accept it!
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    . George: I accept the offer.
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    . Mr Steve: Are you sure, three questions then you are free to go.
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    . George: Alright, split it out.
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    . Mr Steve: Good, i like your spirit! here is the question.
    1. I am something, the owner doesn’t used me, the buyer doesn’t used me, even the one that they are using for doesn’t touch me; What am i?
    2. I am something, people fear me, mentioning of my name scared them; What am i?
    3. I am something, people don’t believe we really exist, and they thought we are just some comic books; What am i?(Riddles crack by Dave Sun).
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    . Mr Steve ended the questions as he stare at George who was still thinking forward.
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    . Mr Barry: Steve are you sure my son will answer that?
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    . Mr Steve: Am also counting on him.
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    . Mr Barry: Continue counting Mr Steve; Am running late for work.
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    . Mr Steve: What kind of work are you doing Mr Barry?
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    . Mr Barry: Am a cop.
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    . Mr Steve: Oh, nice meeting you..
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    George cuts.
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    . George: Will you guys shut up and allow me to think.
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    . Mr Barry was furious but Mr Steve was only smiling as he said.
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    . Mr Steve: You’ve been thinking for a while George, keep up, there is nothing else you will do.
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    . George: So that means you are not enrolling me?
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    . Mr Steve: No, i didn’t means that, you are in George, the question that i asked you are always for some of my students who prove that they are genius, since you can’t have it, it’s okay, give me a second, let me call your class teacher.
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    . Few minutes, a young lady around 30’s walks in, she was fair in complexion, she was wearing a red gown.
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    . Lady: Hello, am Mrs Cara, your class teacher.
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    . Mr Steve: Here is George, your new student.
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    . Mrs Cara: Okay George how old are you?
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    . George: Am 13years of age!
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    . Mrs Cara: Welcome please follow me.
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    . Mr Barry: Behaved yourself son, thank you once again, nice meeting you Mr Steve.
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    . Mr Steve: Is my pleasure!
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    . As they were about to exit, George turns once again as he faced Mr Steve.
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    . George: Mr Steve, am genius, what i meant genius, am like a cellphone without connection, your questions got me wondering, let me just spilled it out.
    1. Coffin
    2. Death
    3. Supernatural
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    . Mr Steve was speechless, he wasn’t able to said anything, he stared at him for so long then he said.
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    . Mr Steve: Awesome, you got it right, you are really genius as you said.
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    . Both his father and Mrs Cara were gasped, they didn’t believe that a young boy of 13years could get an answer to that, Mrs Cara who was shocked, she has served in this school for a year and Mr Steve will asked all of his students whose blamed to be genius but none got it right, but here a boy of 13years old just got it right, he’s so amazing.
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    #CLASSROOM*
    12:02pm
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    . Mrs Cara: Hello Class this is our new student, make him feel welcome.

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    THE FORBIDDEN TEMPLE (The Demonic Secret Place)
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    Author : Dave Sun
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    CHAPTER 3 (THREE)
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    #MR_BARRY_HOUSE*
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    9:00pm
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    . Geogre: I hate this f-----g school and everything here; How i wish i have super abilities, the only power is just bullied some kids, arrg…….
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    . Mr Barry: George why did you not stopped all this hokum and listen to us, we’re your parents for Christ’s sake
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    . George: Dad i loves the way am like that, it makes me feel so good and special.
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    . Mr Barry: What so special there? It only makes you seem so bad like a demons, what is the needs of you being like this?
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    . George: Power, control and needs.
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    . Mr Barry: I have try every possible to get you out from this mess but it seems like you don’t want to, now you’re on your own if anything happens to you then just count me out.
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    . George: What will happen to me?
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    . Mr Barry: Your mom and I has try our very best to care for you, you’re a cursed child for us, i regret being your father!
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    . George: Is that all you got, calling me a cursed child then be it, when thing happened to me then f--k off, don’t come looking for me.
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    . George picking up his sweater, he walks out from the door using the backyard and banging the door as well.
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    . Mr Barry: George, George where did you think you’re going to at this time of the hour, come back it’s dangerous.
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    . #KENXO_STREET*
    22K/M
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    11:30pm
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    . George who was still walking but he could hear his father voice wailing, he put his sweater on, he was freezing, he didn’t realize that he had gone too deep, there was no light or a moving car along the road, it was just him and the dark;
    he was not afraid of the dark, this was not his first time he was seen on the road walking alone, just then he heard a sound from behind as he didn’t mind the sound, he can see anything in the dark, a meow sound from the cat makes him to stopped from going further.
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    . George: What’s it cat?
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    . Cat: Meow meow meow came from the cat again.
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    . George: Just leave me alone if you can’t tell me what is wrong.
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    . The cat who stood up as it change to an unknown creature.
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    . George: Who are you?
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    . Cat: Am a demon!
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    . George: Demon of what?
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    . Cat: Just an ordinary demon!
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    . George: Demon, i was about to passed before you interrupted so can you excuse me?
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    . Cat: Alright I’ll but first i want your blood.
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    . With a twinkle of an eye, the demon grab him as he wanted to bite him, a great force pushed him away as he start burning.
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    . DemonCat: Who are you?
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    . George: Am George the cursed child.
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    George who was afraid as he keeps wondering what just happened, why did he said that, the demon gave out a loud cries as he burn to ashes, why is the demon burning? who am i? This question keeps repeating in his head as he turns and ran back towards the house.
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    Thanks for following up with the epic story, am not perfect but trying to be the best story writer, if you find any errors, please try and understand it just that i loves supernatural that’s why i posted it, God bless you all for reading.
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    THE FORBIDDEN TEMPLE (The Demonic Secret Place)
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    Author : Dave Sun
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    CHAPTER 4 (FOUR)
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    #MR_BARRY_HOUSE*
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    2:30pm
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    Mrs Alice: Honey where is George?
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    . Mrs Alice shouted from the bathroom.
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    . Mr Barry: I don’t know where he went to, I’ve been searching for him for so long!
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    . Water was heard dripping as the tub was turn off as Mrs Alice zoomed out.
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    . Mrs Alice: What did you say about my son?
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    . Mr Barry: Calm down darling, he will be back.
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    . Mrs Alice: If anything happens to my son, i will just ripe out your heart
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    . Mr Barry: Eh woman, watch your tongue, Joe was just stubborn like him, George is cursed like him.
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    . Mrs Alice: Don’t mentioned my father’s name here, this is our son we are talking!
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    . Mr Barry: Bullshit! George doesn’t want to change from your father’s way, take a good look at him, he’s like him.
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    . Mrs Alice begin to wept bitterly, opening the door as she bang it and locked herself in.
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    . Mr Barry moves towards the door as he approached.
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    . Mr Barry: Not again honey; am sorry
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    . Mrs Alice: Go away, i don’t want to see you again!
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    . Mr Barry: I told you I’m sorry Alice, i didn’t know what came over me, forgive me and i promise it won’t happening again.
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    . Mrs Alice: Promised, you always make a promise but you never stick to it.
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    . Mr Barry: I know but just believe me on this one
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    . The door suddenly opens as Mr Barry hugs his wife and kiss her head.
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    . Mr Barry: I promise i won’t hurt you anymore.
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    . Then suddenly the back door opens as here stood George who was standing in angry 😠 mode.
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    . George: Who am i? What am i? And why did you called me a cursed child?
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    . Silence embedded as his parents stood and not able to say anything, their mouth stammering.
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    . George: Am asking about something, just not keep your f-----g mouth shut, say something.
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    . Mr Barry was first to speak.
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    . Mr Barry: What had comes over you son? Why all this changes?
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    . George: Stop pretending father and tells me the truth, what i need to you!
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    . Mrs Alice: What has comes over you son?
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    . George: Please mom step aside let dad tell me why did he always called me a cursed child.
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    . Mrs Alice: You do what?
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    . Mr Barry: It was a mistakes; I swear i really didn’t meant to.
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    . Mrs Alice: Why are you taking Joe blame upon my son?
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    . George: Today i saw a cat transform to a demon, as he wanted to grab me to drink my blood, a force pushes him away and he started burning to ashes, father you calling me a cursed child specific that so then tells me who exactly am i? Or else am going to ripe your heart out.
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    . Mr Barry who was still hugging his wife released as both of them sat down on the couch.
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    . Mr Barry: Sit son; let me explain this to you!
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    . George: I won’t, just tell me what i need to know.
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    . Mr Barry: Your mother’s father was just stubborn like you, he was a jest and freak(πŸ˜‚), always acting weird but unlike you, he did something that always makes him to behave like a demon, but he wasn’t a demon.
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    . George: If he was a demon like you say.
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    . Mrs Alice: Nobody knows, he just disappear one day and nobody knows where he went to, so at last we gave up searching for him.
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    . George: Then explain why did you always call me a cursed child?
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    . Mr Barry: Because of the way your grandpa is? Anybody who’s always stubborn and behaved like that in our family is always a cursed person in between them something bad might happened.
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    . George: Then explain to me why did the demon burn to ashes.
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    . Mr Barry looked at his wife who was staring at him.
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    . Mr Barry: Just give us some minutes son, we’ll be back.
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    . Mr Barry stood up follow by his wife as they opens the door and closes it back.
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    . The waves carries the sound to his ear, he couldn’t not believe his eyes, he could hear everything they were discussing about him.
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    . George: What’s happening to me!
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